It’s not often that I have to stop myself and wonder if what I am about to put in a story is too much exposition. I know every story has it, but when is it too much at once or too much at all?
It’s a continuing problem for me.
Here’s the thing…
Morgan the Cursed is my first challenging story for me in that I am writing it from the first-person perspective. I have to constantly remind myself I cannot describe what is happening when she is not there.
On top of that, I am having the problem of do I internet her present thoughts as chapters in the book as well or just stick to the flashback story.
The following passage is one I am problems with as to whether I should put it into the story proper or leave it out. Constructive criticism is appreciated.
The passage…
You’re probably wondering by now what’s with my mom. Most skeptics after being brained by something propelled by the unseen would have started to believe there was some validity to the supernatural being a thing. After all, how DO you explain shit flying around in your house when you KNOW you’re not the one throwing the things?
We didn’t know it at the time but the thing that zipped into the house that day was digging its claws into Mom and was feeding her stubborn nature while feeding off of her growing frustration that Dad was defending me and not agreeing with her as to whether I was off my rocker or not.
If you missed it, Dad comes from a family of sensitive. It skipped him, but he knows about this stuff and has seen what some entities can do.
Mom’s never had to deal with any of that and was always taught that what you can’t see does not exist.
Enough of me interrupting. Where was I? Right…
What do you guys think? Put it in, or leave it out?
Until next time,
Anissa “Maddy” Walker
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